Friday, September 23, 2011

fff55. A question of tact

It had been a long and tiring hearing. The coroner said it was impossible to tell why the death happened, and so he had to return a verdict of misadventure. The evidence said he’d been cleaning his gun when it went off and shot him in the face.  But we all know what that means.

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55 words for The G Man. I know it's depressing, but it's kind of extracted from a short story I'm working on. It struck me that the paragraph was about the right length - and I edited it accordingly.

12 comments:

izzy said...

"Misadventure" ?!! Great Heaven-
I have never cleaned a gun loaded!
- I do suppose if a bullet was jammed on the chamber....However that was one reason I had a 'single shot' rifle- Good story, thanks!

Brian Miller said...

ugh yes sadly...except my friend flinched and has lived a second lease on life without a face...

Margaret said...

Yikes! I don't know, I think it COULD mean he was just cleaning his gun... My husband once saw a patient in the ER who had put his hand under a riding lawn mower (blade still running) and cut a finger off. Later that afternoon, the same man came back... with ANOTHER finger cut off.

He hadn't learned his lesson to wait for the engine to completely stop before cleaning out the grass underneath. Can you imagine? But it is a true story.

Eric 'Bubba' Alder said...

Nothing wrong with parsing down a previous bit of writing for a quick 55 - I did that too!

Morning said...

interesting 55.
loved the twists in the story.

Doctor FTSE said...

Vert well edited too!

G-Man said...

Annie...?
Was your central character stupid?
whether he was or wasn't, the bottom line is that he's dead.
Loved your truncated 55
Thanks for playing, and have a Kick Ass Week-End

Monkey Man said...

Misadventure caught my eye as well. Classic.

hedgewitch said...

Very clever, using a paragraph from your story--these 55's kill me every week as i am way too long winded. ;_)

Mama Zen said...

This gave me a bit of a shiver!

Leslie said...

Hmm have missed visiting you - a misadventure to be sure
delightful 55

snafu said...

I wonder how many 'misadventures' have been recorded in the Coroner's office over the years.